Deus Ex Machina!

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  1. thew40's Avatar

    thew40 said:

    Deus Ex Machina!

    My first pure NA fanfic! Yay!

    On Primus, He-Man and the Galactic Guardians encounter a massive vessel currently seated in orbit. Who is within it? What do they want with Primus?

    The beginning of a "New Adventures" epic!

    Deus Ex Machina

    Chapter One: "We Come in Peace"

    ~W~
    Tales of Masters of the Universe
    The story of Masters of the Universe - spanning from Skeletor's origin to the final fate of He-Man!
    Masters of the Universe: New Legacy
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  2. ZeroCool's Avatar

    ZeroCool said:
    Good start.

    I can't remember the New Adventures clearly, but as far as I remember you've caught the atomospere of the show well.
    God's in his heaven - all's right with the world
     
  3. Wacky Martin's Avatar

    Wacky Martin said:
    Look forward to reading more, it feels very much like the cartoon
     
  4. thew40's Avatar

    thew40 said:
    Hit quite a streak today. Brand-new stuff for ya.

    Chapter Two . . . who are the Patheon? What do they want with Primus?

    "The Patheon"

    Answers . . . and more questions!

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    Wacky Martin: Prasie from Ceaser! It has the cartoon feel now, but it'll grow up quite a bit in the next few chapters.


    ~W~
    Tales of Masters of the Universe
    The story of Masters of the Universe - spanning from Skeletor's origin to the final fate of He-Man!
    Masters of the Universe: New Legacy
    Find out what happened after the 200x series! Featuring stories and artwork from throughout the fan community!

    WANTED: Snake Mountain stands, Wind Raider, and the Griffen
     
  5. thew40's Avatar

    thew40 said:
    New chapter, folks.

    As the Patheon takes their place on Primus, He-Man and Mara grow closer! Plus: unexpected trouble for Flipshot.

    "Initiation"

    ~W~
    Tales of Masters of the Universe
    The story of Masters of the Universe - spanning from Skeletor's origin to the final fate of He-Man!
    Masters of the Universe: New Legacy
    Find out what happened after the 200x series! Featuring stories and artwork from throughout the fan community!

    WANTED: Snake Mountain stands, Wind Raider, and the Griffen
     
  6. Wacky Martin's Avatar

    Wacky Martin said:
    I like the darker tone it seems to be taking, although I cant help but feel werban deserved that

    Are Skeletor and the Mutants gonna play much of a role down the line? :0
     
  7. thew40's Avatar

    thew40 said:
    Quote Originally Posted by Wacky Martin
    I like the darker tone it seems to be taking, although I cant help but feel werban deserved that
    Glad you're liking the tone. It's gets more mature with this chapter. Werban . . . something about that guy makes him such a joy to write. Jerks make for great characters.

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    New chapter!

    The Galactic Guardians seek out the true nature of the Patheon! Who is the true master of their task force? What dark secret lies in the Carrier? Plus: Flipshot's a chick! And He-Man and Mara's whirlwind relationship continues!

    "Face To Face"

    ~W~
    Tales of Masters of the Universe
    The story of Masters of the Universe - spanning from Skeletor's origin to the final fate of He-Man!
    Masters of the Universe: New Legacy
    Find out what happened after the 200x series! Featuring stories and artwork from throughout the fan community!

    WANTED: Snake Mountain stands, Wind Raider, and the Griffen
     
  8. ZeroCool's Avatar

    ZeroCool said:
    Great work.

    I like the way you showed the relationship between He-Man and Mara.
    God's in his heaven - all's right with the world
     
  9. thew40's Avatar

    thew40 said:
    He-Man and the gang return to Primus, and must now deal with the consequences of their actions.

    "On the Run"

    ~W~
    Tales of Masters of the Universe
    The story of Masters of the Universe - spanning from Skeletor's origin to the final fate of He-Man!
    Masters of the Universe: New Legacy
    Find out what happened after the 200x series! Featuring stories and artwork from throughout the fan community!

    WANTED: Snake Mountain stands, Wind Raider, and the Griffen
     
  10. Brimstone's Avatar

    Brimstone said:
    I've only just started reading this story and am already hooked.
    My Fan-Fic projects:

    Eternia: The Dark Years: Enter Eternia a world that has fallen to the hands of the Evil Horde.
    Coming Soon:Roots 2: Fear stalks Primus. (A NA sequel to Roots by Brimstone and Thew40)

    My art (mostly MOTU related ) please feel free to comment.
     
  11. thew40's Avatar

    thew40 said:
    Thanks Brimstone!

    I'll be getting it up-dated in the next couple of days.

    ~W~
    Tales of Masters of the Universe
    The story of Masters of the Universe - spanning from Skeletor's origin to the final fate of He-Man!
    Masters of the Universe: New Legacy
    Find out what happened after the 200x series! Featuring stories and artwork from throughout the fan community!

    WANTED: Snake Mountain stands, Wind Raider, and the Griffen
     
  12. thew40's Avatar

    thew40 said:
    New chapter. Short, but sweet.

    Skeletor and Flogg make their next move. Flipshot comes clean with his new form. Mara and He-Man figure what they're doing with themselves.

    "Down Time"

    It's short, but it gets the story moving.

    ~W~
    Tales of Masters of the Universe
    The story of Masters of the Universe - spanning from Skeletor's origin to the final fate of He-Man!
    Masters of the Universe: New Legacy
    Find out what happened after the 200x series! Featuring stories and artwork from throughout the fan community!

    WANTED: Snake Mountain stands, Wind Raider, and the Griffen
     
  13. ZeroCool's Avatar

    ZeroCool said:
    good chapter.

    You're right: it definitely gets the story moving.

    I wonder what will happen to flipshot next time
    God's in his heaven - all's right with the world
     
  14. thew40's Avatar

    thew40 said:
    Quote Originally Posted by ZeroCool

    I wonder what will happen to flipshot next time
    Just wait and see.

    By the way, here's Flipshot's current form, curtesy of my fiancee . . .



    Next chapter should be up sometime next week.

    ~W~
    Tales of Masters of the Universe
    The story of Masters of the Universe - spanning from Skeletor's origin to the final fate of He-Man!
    Masters of the Universe: New Legacy
    Find out what happened after the 200x series! Featuring stories and artwork from throughout the fan community!

    WANTED: Snake Mountain stands, Wind Raider, and the Griffen
     
  15. Wacky Martin's Avatar

    Wacky Martin said:
    Glad to read more, liked the Skeletor/Flogg scene, cool picture
     
  16. thew40's Avatar

    thew40 said:
    The final chapter has been posted!

    The Galactic Guardians take on the Patheon and the Mutants!

    Expect the unexpected!

    "At the Steps of the Council Chamber"

    ~W~
    Tales of Masters of the Universe
    The story of Masters of the Universe - spanning from Skeletor's origin to the final fate of He-Man!
    Masters of the Universe: New Legacy
    Find out what happened after the 200x series! Featuring stories and artwork from throughout the fan community!

    WANTED: Snake Mountain stands, Wind Raider, and the Griffen
     
  17. Wacky Martin's Avatar

    Wacky Martin said:
    A good conclusion, I enjoyed reading this, and am eager for the next part now

    Liked the Sebrian and Skeletor battle, and the fact Crita saved Skeletor. Flogg was cool here too, though I think he seems a bit too clever.
    "Evil can never defeat good!"
    "Don't be ridiculous, of course it can!"
    He-Man and Skeletor in 'Crack in the World'.
     
  18. thew40's Avatar

    thew40 said:
    Quote Originally Posted by Wacky Martin
    Flogg was cool here too, though I think he seems a bit too clever.
    I wanted him to see a little more compotent in this story than he was on the show. Sometimes I felt like the writers were short-changing Flogg. I mean, the guy did raise a space fleet and an army against Primus. Gotta be at least somewhat smart to do that.

    I figure there are various layers to Flogg, too. We'll be seeing some different sides to him as time goes on.

    ~W~
    Tales of Masters of the Universe
    The story of Masters of the Universe - spanning from Skeletor's origin to the final fate of He-Man!
    Masters of the Universe: New Legacy
    Find out what happened after the 200x series! Featuring stories and artwork from throughout the fan community!

    WANTED: Snake Mountain stands, Wind Raider, and the Griffen
     
  19. Ginuwine's Avatar

    Ginuwine said:
    why is flpishot a woman?
     
  20. thew40's Avatar

    thew40 said:
    Quote Originally Posted by Ginuwine View Post
    why is flpishot a woman?
    Wow! Surprise necro-thread!

    Flipshot was transformed into a woman because he kept hitting on a female Mutant who had the power to alter her own and others DNA. It was a form of revenge. He gets turned back in the next story.

    ~W~
    Tales of Masters of the Universe
    The story of Masters of the Universe - spanning from Skeletor's origin to the final fate of He-Man!
    Masters of the Universe: New Legacy
    Find out what happened after the 200x series! Featuring stories and artwork from throughout the fan community!

    WANTED: Snake Mountain stands, Wind Raider, and the Griffen
     
  21. Medusa said:
    You must write something about the fate of the Bitter Rose Goddess amidst the onslaught of all this technology! It is a rambling epic of what happens when the onslaught of the futuristic technology in NA destroys Eternia's humanity and innocence,..and only the power of the Bitter Rose can save all from the evil that emerges to conquer this soulless world! It is a dark tale you were fated to write, many, many eons ago. See the Teelana smiley? That's her talkin, so you must obey...

    And I loved Deus Ex Machina. Superb.
    Yes, luckypoo,..I am the famous Full Fallen Moon! Yes, 'Mountain Of Hyacles' should be required he-fan reading!